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Post by Salzmark on Oct 13, 2020 11:35:06 GMT -6
Excellent work, WeirdRaptor—a clearer and spookier draft. I admire how you bring in the parents in the beginning without showing them “onstage.” I didn’t actually have a problem with Bobby’s looking at the tree, but you’ve gone more into detail here and it works. A really entertaining story.
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Oct 13, 2020 11:39:52 GMT -6
Excellent work, WeirdRaptor —a clearer and spookier draft. I admire how you bring in the parents in the beginning without showing them “onstage.” I didn’t actually have a problem with Bobby’s looking at the tree, but you’ve gone more into detail here and it works. A really entertaining story. Thanks. I'm hoping to try publishing once I get an entire anthology of stories taking place in this town written. They're all going to be roughly 10-page shorts about some weird, spooky aspect of "Red Grove". I followed your advice to cut the gym teacher and gave everything to the pharmacist, and that worked out pretty well. I actually had a lot of fun considering how the sweaty, paranoid, breathless child suddenly bursting into his store would look from his perspective while writing. That's why you got comments like "Bobby still looked like a miniature crackhead to him."
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Post by Salzmark on Oct 19, 2020 11:47:22 GMT -6
Here’s another under-500-worder by me:
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Oct 19, 2020 16:07:38 GMT -6
Here’s another under-500-worder by me: Nice reversal of the "ghost woman hitchhiker" trope. Loved the story.
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Post by Salzmark on Oct 19, 2020 19:17:02 GMT -6
Here’s another under-500-worder by me: Nice reversal of the "ghost woman hitchhiker" trope. Loved the story. Thanks, this one just seemed to flow.
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Post by Salzmark on Nov 9, 2020 11:45:50 GMT -6
Here’s one of mine again…
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Nov 9, 2020 17:14:48 GMT -6
Here’s one of mine again… I'm not sure of what happened at all, but I enjoyed it. That's about all I can say to your usual mindfuckery.
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Post by Salzmark on Nov 9, 2020 17:34:48 GMT -6
Here’s one of mine again… I'm not sure of what happened at all, but I enjoyed it. That's about all I can say to your usual mindfuckery. “ Omnia exeunt in mysterium,” eh? My work here is done.
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Nov 9, 2020 17:37:24 GMT -6
I'm not sure of what happened at all, but I enjoyed it. That's about all I can say to your usual mindfuckery. “ Omnia exeunt in mysterium,” eh? My work here is done. It reminded me of 1408, both the short story and the film.
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Post by Salzmark on Nov 9, 2020 21:16:09 GMT -6
“ Omnia exeunt in mysterium,” eh? My work here is done. It reminded me of 1408, both the short story and the film. It’s funny, I like both and I didn’t even really see the similarities until after I’d finished my story. I’ve always been a sucker for haunted hotels.
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Nov 9, 2020 22:15:46 GMT -6
It reminded me of 1408, both the short story and the film. It’s funny, I like both and I didn’t even really see the similarities until after I’d finished my story. I’ve always been a sucker for haunted hotels. Well, the best I could figure is that something otherworldly was playing mind games with the woman the bulk of the story followed, and eventually lured her into the officially non-existent Room 13. That's my take, and that it reminds me mildly of 1408.
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Post by Salzmark on Nov 25, 2020 14:15:23 GMT -6
The following story (by me) flopped at r/libraryofshadows, got deleted by a moderator at r/nosleep, and did relatively well at r/wholesomenosleep. So who knows if it’s any good?!
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Nov 25, 2020 14:22:46 GMT -6
The following story (by me) flopped at r/libraryofshadows, got deleted by a moderator at r/nosleep, and did relatively well at r/wholesomenosleep. So who knows if it’s any good?! So I take it Nosleep/r doesn't like stories that leave it up to the imaginations of the viewer to discern what happened? This is good. Certainly not worthy of just being deleted for no reason.
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Post by Salzmark on Nov 25, 2020 14:30:26 GMT -6
The following story (by me) flopped at r/libraryofshadows, got deleted by a moderator at r/nosleep, and did relatively well at r/wholesomenosleep. So who knows if it’s any good?! So I take it Nosleep/r doesn't like stories that leave it up to the imaginations of the viewer to discern what happened? This is good. Certainly not worthy of just being deleted for no reason. The reason they gave me is that the horror needed to have happened and not just been a dream. I meant, of course, to leave just what happened up to the reader. Apparently that wasn’t clear enough.
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Nov 25, 2020 14:38:43 GMT -6
So I take it Nosleep/r doesn't like stories that leave it up to the imaginations of the viewer to discern what happened? This is good. Certainly not worthy of just being deleted for no reason. The reason they gave me is that the horror needed to have happened and not just been a dream. I meant, of course, to leave just what happened up to the reader. Apparently that wasn’t clear enough. From where I'm sitting, there's a wide range of potential scenarios here. 1) The knitting woman could be a cosmic entity that's messing with the protagonist in visions and possible time loops. 2) The knitting woman is actually nice, never meant to frighten the protagonist, and later sent her back in time so she might be get away from Walter on the next go. 3) They're just dreams. Those are the possibilities just off the top of my head.
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