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Post by Salzmark on Jan 19, 2024 17:07:37 GMT -6
I’m not sure what made me think of this, but a few years back I chatted on Reddit with an aspiring composer who was asking for people to submit lyrics that he would set to music. The lyric had to have the theme of rust, though.
So, you know me, I had to write one and submit it. It was a quick job, but I think it’s OK. And the composer, A.J. Vandalia, set… some of it. He cut some words that messed up the meter, and he ended up only setting the introductory verse, the first refrain, and the bridge. But still—having even that set was a cool experience.
Here it is (that’s A.J. in the video):
And here’s my full lyric:There ya go. (Where ya go? I dunno.)
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Post by WeirdRaptor on Jan 19, 2024 18:16:13 GMT -6
Salzmark, I dunno. I like it. The last bit is overwrought, but before it, it was an okay piece about the inevitability of decay.
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Post by Salzmark on Jan 22, 2024 11:30:35 GMT -6
Salzmark, I dunno. I like it. The last bit is overwrought, but before it, it was an okay piece about the inevitability of decay. Ha, thanks. I like it fine, though on this reading I’m noticing flaws (e.g., it should be a favorite friendship that rusts in the end, but of course that wouldn’t fit the rhyme scheme). Interesting that you find the ending overwrought—I couldn’t figure out why someone would be singing about this topic, so I added the twist that, to put it bluntly, he’s been dumped. “Quaint honor” is a steal from Andrew Marvell’s “To His Coy Mistress,” which I adore; I don’t think I’d put it in a song written for a specific character, it’s too highfalutin’ a reference, but I thought it was fine for what is basically a pop song (very old-school pop, natch).
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